I just read ur first chapter, and it hooked me. I don’t think you need to change anything. You just have to be more confident!:blob_cookie: It's only three chapters. I'm sure that the more chapters you have, the more readers you'll attract:blob_happy:
That's the reason why I don't like him...
Real :'( You talking about the girl and her Grandpa right? but the story is really good; only the MC sucks. I hate him for stealing the blueprint from the Granpa without giving him anything in return. I don't really remember why, but I think the...