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Easily the harshest feedback I got but valued none the less. Glad to hear you at least thought the mystery was good. It means I getting one of the two main aspects right. As for the rivalry, I get where you are coming from. Not sure if its where I chose to start the story but I have kind of...

Any reason? Fair. My fear with doing that is writing something later that contradicts something I wrote earlier. Is that something you ever worry about and how do you get past it? There's my problem, I keep trying to write with my toes lol. Keeping a consistent release schedule is already a...

Wanted to pick peoples brains. Do you like to post as you are writing out the story, or do you write it first then post it in bits?

Chris Mitchell's a high-school athlete in his senior year, who is unsure of what he wants to do after high school; throwing himself into hockey as its one of the few things he's ever known. His dad had enrolled him into the sport when he was 6 and died when he was only 8. Because of this he was...

Siblings Chris and Liah Mitchells already rocky relationship is put to the test when they, and their loved ones, get tangled up in a strange series of murders on a drive home one night. What follows is a ordeal that sends one of them into a spiral of madness, suicidal tendencies and drug abuse...

Ok. I don't have 3 parts posted separately but my First chapter is the equivalent of that, since I original wrote it for book format and not the format most people post on this site. Been posting in shorter bits since then. All this just to say that you only have to read the first chapter...

No questions, you got across your points clearly. Glad to hear you thought the characters were good, as it's probably the thing I care about most. As for grammar, I already know it's not my strong suite. Though so far, you have given the clearest examples of where I can improve and greatly...

Question before I post, what if I have my 3 chapters split up into multiple parts? Do you just read the first 3 available parts of the story or read until a chapter 4 is clearly indicated?

New author writing their first story. Chapter 1 is long, but it's split into 3 parts. Chapters going forward are going to be split into sections. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/792785/missing-hearts/

Cheese oozed out the sides of the bread, that currently sizzled on the pan. They used a spatula to check underneath, to make sure is was golden brown before flipping it over. Already on the plate was a delectable glop of ketchup, just waiting to have something dunked in it. When it was finally...

Thank you very much :) I'll do my best to keep these things in mind going forward. Next chapter will hopefully flesh out the characters more as its set during a normal day for them.

Wrote my first chapter and I am trying to get anyone to read it lol It's a small town drama horror about two siblings who have a unstable relationship with each other that gets put to the test when they get entangled in a series of murders in their home town. On top of dealing with the trauma...

Mainly I want to know if my character interactions are good as well as the mystery I set up. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/792785/missing-hearts/stats/ but all feedback is welcomed

i finished the first chapter of my story and looking for any and all feedback https://www.scribblehub.com/series/792785/missing-hearts/stats/

Looking for feedback on my first chapter https://www.scribblehub.com/series/792785/missing-hearts/stats/ I already know of some mistakes when it comes to punctuation that I intend to fix, among other small grammar errors. mainly want to know what you think of character interactions and...