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Honestly I think complaints about passive/active voice are bullish!t. I’ve been told by teachers and professors for years that I write...

Okay first off you need to change the name of the world. Avalorn? Seriously? I tried to type it in and autocorrect automatically changed...

Honestly not a bad idea but the not remembering anything is kinda a deal breaker. It could also be horror with someone remembering...

Not an author just a long time reader so my opinion might not hold the same weight. In my experience people who post more than one story...

Then I’d take a look at your writing before posting or get a proofreader or editor to read your stuff before posting it.

According to the internet the upper middle and lower dantian already exist in the bodies as the vessels which essence is taken and...

Honestly it looks great ?

I know some authors do commissions for some of their tiers like writing little side chapters from other characters perspectives that...

Most long term users, which is where your more dedicated fan base will pull from, have a policy of not latching onto stories that are...

I’d want mine to be easily portable but also not so small I’d lose it. Maybe one of those knives with the knuckle duster handles? Maybe...

Yeah I’m going to question your choices. I voted for option A just because I don’t like Shinji and frankly, I have to question your...

I would say first thought is the main character. Of course you have to start with a hero then you have to do plot. I mean both are...

Milf is a fetish for a reason. Though I will say sugar mama would probably work more in the long term than dommy momma. If a person has...

More details. Some more foreshadowing. Names. If you’ve got any books with blurbs in the back or book jackets try looking at them for...

Rising panic implies time. As in starts small and shoots thru the roof. You have the injury and the freak out within a few sentences...