I like your story. I skipped right to the actual story, I did not read the world or items chapters. The characters are likeable and fun. I do wish there was a bit more description, but over all it is a solid and fun story. I would give it a 8/10. There is room for improvement.
I wrote two stories that can not be searched either by tags or title. One of them is several weeks old and still can't be searched. The only way to find either story is to go on my profile. This sucks for obvious reasons. I don't know wat else to do so I am going to link them here and hope...
Hello.
If you would not mind I would appreciate it if you could look at a story of mine. <3
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/981931/the-value-of-hard-work/