Recent content by Funnyface

I think you should write out individual scenes as you think of them and edit them later to match the grand plan you come up with. Then you are working and not procrastinating. And sometimes writing something out helps you think it through- you have to justify your ideas to your audience to make...

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I think I have graphomania.

I have two that I'm making regular updates for, but I'm working on two more. Maybe I'm stretching myself a little thin.

It’s somehow too direct and too confusing at the same time. Personally, I’d try to avoid using the word MC in the summary at all... it’s just too direct. I like the fun and casual tone, though. You could keep the tone but make it more clear what’s going on.

Anything can work as long as it’s interesting and fun, but algebra is widely hated for a reason... it’s dry! Unless you’re a math teacher or something, I think it would be easier to make a story about almost anything else!

I find it kind of strange as well, but maybe it’s more trouble than it’s worth to fix it since adding a bunch of systems to fix it might just introduce strange problems like Cadmar said. If you work concurrently in any type of program like MS Word or Notepad you can get the real number from...

In my opinion the best way to have a 'psychological' story is an unreliable narrator, that way you have to understand the character's personality to understand the story. Another good option is magical realism where the story world itself reflects some kind of extreme emotional state like Yume...

You could definitely mix it up. I barely notice it as a cliche, but you could do something different like: It was this simple comment that led him to the worst week of his life or Those casual words sealed his fate or He never could have known that this simple comment would destroy him...

Thanks, Seahiatus! You're right on all counts. Do you want me to look at yours?

Hey everyone. This is for my new series Psydeath. Can someone give it a look? I've rewritten it like 50 times to try and make it nice and clean. The Pit is the occult capital of the world, a dirty and violent city where powerful criminal organizations wage war for control of the drug trade, a...

I agree with Myuym. Fanfictions have an edge over other stories because they don't have to waste any time developing a mental image of the characters, and if you really have a unique story to tell with the existing characters in a new direction then there you go. Overall I think they're not bad...

You use a lot of informal language like 'git gud' and 'ground pounded,' it's not bad but I'd be careful not to overdo it. There you go, buddy. My advice would be to use a spelling/grammar checker, it will help a lot, and also try reading the sentences out loud to make sure they flow...