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Eryxoo reacted to Bimbanana's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with
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GREAT! Its really great to hear that you start early. Yes, you need to fix your prose that are very heavily AI-touched at the moment... -
Eryxoo replied to the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated).I understand criticism about writing style, and I’m here to improve, so that part is fine. Just to clarify, I’m 16 and English isn’t my...
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Eryxoo replied to the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated).Hello everyone, I've read all your replies and thanks for the feedbacks you've provided, and it looked like I really did need some...
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Eryxoo reacted to Makimaam's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with Like.
Honest feedback? Sure, since you asked. I didn’t read your chapter. I didn’t read your synopsis. I skimmed. My eyes trailed across a...
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Eryxoo reacted to Rosica's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with Like.
At least make him relive his most depressing memories to make it more anime.
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Eryxoo reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with Like.
The chapters are short, but the narrative clutter is too much. What casual reader would want to read two chapters just to watch MC stand...
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Eryxoo reacted to Ararara's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with Like.
Well, they were quite short chapters. :sweating_profusely: I'm willing to give most stories a shot
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Eryxoo reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with Like.
You read 10 chapters for this kind of narrative?! Too crazy! :blob_pout:
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Eryxoo reacted to Ararara's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with Like.
well, it doesn't help that the first minute of reading has this pattern three times. it's the most famous/obvious ChatGPT pattern, the...
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Eryxoo reacted to Rosica's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with Like.
They read like a single chapter split to three. More chapters can give you more exposure, but it won't help you get readers if the...
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Eryxoo reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) with Like.
The synopsis is too confusing for the reader. Change the synopsis to make it more salesy. You can use the following synopsis formula...
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Eryxoo posted the thread [CLOSED]Need honest feedback on my story (not sugar-coated) in Story Feedback.hey, I’ve been writing a story called Her Last Rain it’s more slow and emotional, not really action or anything, and I’m kinda worried...
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Eryxoo replied to the thread Low attention span reviews and ratings [Open].Here's mine, Her Last Rain this is my first novel so I don't know that much about writing, anyway I'll appreciate any feedbacks you...
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Eryxoo reacted to GreenStudio's post in the thread What type of literature inspires your writing? with Like.
These are all bangers.
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Eryxoo replied to the thread What type of literature inspires your writing?.Hmm, I think what inspires me most are stories that mix warmth with something fragile underneath. Where characters learn to care about...