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I agree. I suppose the more concise way to phrase what I was saying was that the OP needs to show *more*. I do see that the effort was...

Okay, if that is the only thing you want to know, I will honestly say that is not yet polished to the point where I could call it...

Your writing is stylized for a very specific niche of readers who aren't me. I want to be upfront about that so you know to ask feedback...

If I'm being honest, I would not keep reading. But that's not a reflection of the story you probably have going in your head. The...

Starting at the beginning. I never like to start off with negative feedback. But I do focus on it because that's how we improve. So let...

You're definitely getting more into the sway of things in the later chapters than the beginning ones. A reader can tell that you are...

Going through the first chapter. Your descriptions and scene creations are pretty solid. I never feel like I'm lost. And it's obvious...

No worries. If you want it to be dreamlike, you should signal that it is intentional. Signal that the narrator isn't fully "conscious"...

I'm sorry, I can't give a number rating because it wouldn't seem fair. But I can give you some tips to help shape this up into a proper...

Well my character does, in fact, eat rusty nails for breakfast. So? With her *own* milk.

In book 1? Oh, just some general PTSD. By book 6? Out of her effing mind.