Ellie_in_Pink's latest activity

You seem to be focusing on what already is there, as opposed to what isn't. Yes, there are a billion algorithmic based stories that...

Thank you so much! I will give this a proper read once i finish work. I think the notes you have provided will help me learn and improve...

First, solid narrative voice. The narrator speaks like a believable person and I enjoy their cadence. Second, don't be afraid of longer...

No worries. You were very specific in your request for feedback, so I wanted to be sure to give it a look. So you're at a clearly...

Hey there, the forums are a bit ... disconnected from the rest of the website. It'll be much easier to get feedback if you post a link.

Okay, first, some good news. Your story is polished enough where the issues are a bit trickier to nail down. I don't know how much is...

It's ... just going to be easier if I repost and write in the margins. You don't need two opening paragraphs. One bit of exposition...

Did you mean to link to your prologue? Because I didn't see a fight scene.

Having read your first chapter, and being thoroughly honest with you, I can't say that I'm too impressed or that I know what you want to...

Yes, perfect. Apologies for neglecting to warn about content. I'll certainly do that next time. Thank you so much for taking the time...

Thanks to both of you! ❤ I try my best to slip in the details later so that it somehow makes more sense. I guess I'm just in a hurry to...

I originally wrote it as a book, should I change the hyphens? I can't tell you how much I appreciate you taking the time to look at it...

Unfortunately, just having a bunch of exposition to explain everything doesn't do what you want it to. Readers need a reason to care...

I'm unemployed enough to take a swing at it. First, speaking as a smut writer myself, you need to mark intense shit in the post if you...

Okay ... so the title of this post was ... strange. But I respect the hustle of trying to rage people into useful feedback. Though it...