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My brief comment is that your synopsis uses overly technical language. It might be suitable for computer science students... but the...

What do you think, Monsieur Orc?

I finally finished my remaster for Sapphire Among Vines! I never thought this day would come! Like... I'll probably give up somewhere...

If a scene doesn’t excite me, I won’t write it. But to reach certain plot points, writing things I don’t enjoy is unavoidable. So...

Mission accomplished, then. That's the point of psychological as a genre. Good job.

Peace be upon you, Sons of Ishmael. Isaac's descendants kiss walls.

As an arab, I can confirm this. However, people usually don’t directly kiss each other’s cheeks. Instead, they place their heads next to...

If you forget to add those to your story you can always pull the pro Kojima move.

Absolutely halal.

I don't know... where that conclusion comes from. Complimenting each other, regardless of gender, is polite and diplomatic. You might...

I see prologue, I skip. What kind of man starts conversation by telling the other man they've become handsome? That's our LGBTQ+...

Maybe you mean... does this story have a hook that keeps readers reading the next chapter? Well, this is more of a preference and...

I appreciate your feedback. Pronoun issues?! That's certainly an issue... I need to check my work more carefully. Thank you. :blob_melt:

I feel like I can't properly rate this prologue. Lune seems to be a young man, but you occasionally mix his pronouns; sometimes it's...

Thanks for your feedback, dude. :blob_salute: :blob_aww: