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If you'd like, please read my feedback thread. I'd love to hear your honest thoughts. All you have to do is answer four questions after...

Thank you for reading :)

It's pretty good. The narrative has avoided the white space syndrome. But I still have a hard time visualizing Zerra's fight scenes...

To be honest, your narrative suffers from head-hopping and white space syndrome. Well, blurry scenes. Readers have a hard time...

The only action I remember was Aegis gambling and it looked like there was going to be a fight in the colosseum.

The more tags, the better. Why not? Though in this case, I'm not sure there will be a large audience interested in the tag. This tag is...

Well, I'm giving my honest impression after reading this narrative without any feedback (constructive suggestions). As a casual reader...

Thanks

I’ll do that later, as I’m sleep-deprived. Today was a busy day.

I think it is when you get a group of mates together to play instruments and sing your favourite songs 🤔

Dude... can you read this thread? I'd love to hear your feedback...

oh, sorry. i didn't include the mid-fight scene but only the climax. before that part, he was overwhelming the other 2 who got...

@Envylope I have met people who will cry even rage around just because of a forum post. Not like it’s unreasonable all the time but...

Sometimes I wanna roast some people on my profile because they won’t be able to delete my post that way and make them ugly cry 'cause...

Oh, hey! That reminds me of something. So, years ago, I would take walks in the middle of the night in the neighborhood. That darkness...