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Well, I already mentioned "...appropriate to a child's psychological development," meaning that narratives from a child's POV should be...

Locking the thread for blatant hijacking of the topic.

I'm not saying you should be stupid. I'm saying you should adjust your intelligence to a child's level. To adults, lightning is simply a...

Narrating a child's first POV is one of the most difficult challenges in writting. Why? Because you need to "lower your intelligence"...

I intended to kill him off as an NPC. He was originally designed to be an annoying NPC. But unintentionally, his character development...

ooh im curious to know more about this, though! What could have been the reason why readers would mistake it for a retcon? Was it the...

I originally planned to portray the veteran knight commander Feroux as a tragic antihero martyr who atones for his past sins through...

It’s better, though a few things are missing: 1. Why drop the Paladin? The hint that a half demon boy has a saintly Paladin for a...

No No I read chapter one and it is like i read nothing at all, I will not continue. There is nothing about it that left an impression...

Ah i see what you mean. When i get time to work on chapter three i will take this into account. Thank you for leaving some feedback, though!

Much appreciated. Okay... so, I am gonna start with the fact that I'm not entirely a fan of GL fics. Dunno why. It's not like I hate...

Thank you! You've actually identified exactly the things I was worried about, and I think your perspective will help me fix them at...

I didn't say there isn't any editor here though :blob_hmm: . I said that no editor would write a forum post full of spelling errors...

NU tagging is getting slimy. A BL got through my filter because the TLer purposefully did not put the warning

I like your initial synopsis, don’t get me wrong, but you need to center it around Aegis instead of the paladin. Right now, you’ve...