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I don't really want to accuse you of anything, and I think you know that I already helped you, so I have good intentions, but either you...

The scene visualization is still rough and blurry. Readers might be confused about where your character is, who they're with, and where...

Rough transition, the character feels like they teleported from the gate to the arena because there is no kinetic movement showing from...

There are actually many criticisms I could make. But now I disike to burden authors with too many demands. I prefer to suggest the most...

Okay, is that the only problem you found? Or do I have to fix something else too? Thanks for replying.

Dude... after reading chapter 1 once, I noticed your narrative has a sudden POV shift problem that makes it prone to head hopping...

Do you like Warhammer? Because there "orks" are also spelled with k. Otherwise, you'd spell them with a c. So he is this noble...

Alrighty then... so, gonna treat your request with the specifics on personality, judgement, morals, likeability, and how you can improve...

Just for the record, yes, I wrote my story to "tell" more than to "show," I know that, and I will say sorry in advance if that bothers...

Hmm... I am still waiting for an answer 😭

Ratings... I hate them. They are a benchmark that implies how well somebody exposed their product, not the quality. At least that's my...

there is the kicker. lol

What if the person you reached out to thought your book is hot garbage?

I don’t really hate slow burn, and a lot of people don’t either. Most readers dropped off because you’re not updating very often—like in...

I mean, yeah, if they've gone through tragedy, mistreated, and have suffered not just themselves but their families have also suffered...