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It is when the perspective you are read shifts mid scene. I think of it as just a technique that when poorly executed can be quite...

I love insipid. Such a good word. Favorites: Petulent (off the top of my head). Such a good word. Least favorite: Very...

Aint a writer without beef with words Favorite: stupid Least Favorite: like a lie Underutilized: incessant Over utilized: like...

Does that count as POV-switching? I thought that was allowed as it is essentially a shorthand for: "Thanks," he thought to himself. I...

Still not for me, but this is much better. The only other bit of advice I'll offer is that, occasionally, your narration becomes too...

Ara ara, Shounen~

Just a friendly reminder. Shounen literally translates to “boy”. Minor boy. ‘Tried my hand at some shounen’

The Secret Lives of Magical Girls is officially popular with vampires girls and cat girls. :blob_aww:

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https://ellipsus.com/read/4FPpal9Gp84KrQAGBJBIF/Eric-shounen-2 The long awaited sequel ! I took your guyses comments in consideration...

Joyager does bring up a good point. Establishing a bit more of the mood would help. However, we might be missing a lot of that preceding...

Nice, I got the vibe down at least :blob_joy: I may have shot myself in the foot by only taking a snapshot of a larger chapter. In...

There's a lot to be said about how much you say. I know that it's a convention of shounen (and prose in general that's styled after...

There is a balance between minimalistic approach to snappy action and leaving it a little too threadbare. You don't want to add much...

(Oops forgot to mention that this was a snippet in an ongoing story, to add some lore to the side character(Eric).) Did not expect such...