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Still not for me, but this is much better. The only other bit of advice I'll offer is that, occasionally, your narration becomes too...

Ara ara, Shounen~

Just a friendly reminder. Shounen literally translates to “boy”. Minor boy. ‘Tried my hand at some shounen’

The Secret Lives of Magical Girls is officially popular with vampires girls and cat girls. :blob_aww:

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https://ellipsus.com/read/4FPpal9Gp84KrQAGBJBIF/Eric-shounen-2 The long awaited sequel ! I took your guyses comments in consideration...

Joyager does bring up a good point. Establishing a bit more of the mood would help. However, we might be missing a lot of that preceding...

Nice, I got the vibe down at least :blob_joy: I may have shot myself in the foot by only taking a snapshot of a larger chapter. In...

There's a lot to be said about how much you say. I know that it's a convention of shounen (and prose in general that's styled after...

There is a balance between minimalistic approach to snappy action and leaving it a little too threadbare. You don't want to add much...

(Oops forgot to mention that this was a snippet in an ongoing story, to add some lore to the side character(Eric).) Did not expect such...

No one must have taught them this mythical skill social etiquette.

Thanks, sis :blob_salute:

It's almost impossible for the new member not to see my feedback. I wrote it yesterday, and today the person asked for honest feedback...

Well, I'll write feedback once I'm in a better mood. I still feel bad, especially after writing such honest feedback to a new member who...