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Thank you, I'll try to implement it. For now I'll revise my chapter 1 again.

If you have the ability to do so, print it out. If not, slap it into word, google docs, or anything else with a highlighter feature, and...

So apart from the Heavy info dump using static description is there anything which i should focus on? or edit completely?

Okay my bad sorry. So only the description which are important should be conveyed through an action, I don't need to go in to details to...

@Eldoria @Fairemont Thank you for spending your time on my work ?.

Well, if that is the case, then make good use of Eldoria's advice and my example to refine your writing and bring forth the improvement...

Character Introduction Given two character introduction scenes with the same biodata and different narrative delivery below: Scene 1...

I understand your advice now. Scene 2 feels much better and easier to read.

I think you are underestimating yourself. You don't know how good it sounds, I can see my book being infinitely better than what it is...

Well, there are many things I want to convey, but I only choose to focus on one thing, "narrative technique." Consider the following...

Yes, more or less like that. Insert descriptions within the actions. But don't overdo it; just include one or two character traits per...

Immaterial? it perfectly summarizes what i wanted to convey! Damn you are good at this.

I agree with most of what @Eldoria has to say. You can cut that description down quite a bit. For example: A draconic berserker, whose...

So i should explain the appearance through actions, is that right? Like action -> effect, action -> effect. What did you feel about the...

I have revised my 3 chapters with the feedbacks i got. Mainly about the sentence structure and how each sentence was carried on to a new...