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Thanks for the review. If you can push through that part, I think most readers will be able to get past it and reach the end of the first chapter, where the more interesting hooks appear. For example, his parents know he is a hero and a reincarnator. There is also the mysterious situation...

I love Isekai and Magus stories and I wanted something similar, something grand, something that can go for thousands of chapters and this is my take. Great Journey: Whims of Fate

Do your worst but don't insult my mother, there are limits. Great Journey: Whims of Fate

My first chapter is pretty solid but you'll definitely drop by the 2nd. Great Journey: Whims of Fate

I read chapter 1. I started skipping the flowery details and focused on the dialogue in chapters 2 through 4. I began rushing through chapter 5, then glanced at your chapter titles. Oh no! The pacing is too slow! I skipped ahead to chapter 9 and rushed through it after a few paragraphs. I did...

I know that, but it kind of reads like it, given what was on there. I’m just telling you the vibes I got from it. It’s your job as a writer to project the right tone, vibe, and imagery, since most of the time readers won’t tell you unless they comment. They’ll just carry that vibe with them in...

I say add more details by having the other person direct obvious questions. "So... You're horny when I'm horny? I apologize for any inappropriate thoughts and feelings you may experience from this point on. Please, take care of me from now on." bows. "How much is a part?" "Can we share skills?"...

Who is “him” in the first sentence? I can only assume Aegis, but the fact that I had to ask means you should lead with the character’s name before using pronouns. “Growls” is capitalized. Is that a pet’s name? Please understand I am basing this off a snippet and don’t have the previous setting...

I can't see her legs anywhere but she does look quite short, lol. In any case, the image isn't supposed to be their standing position as those in the background were pasted on for introduction rather than a specific scene. Also, Oof... It hurts that my first chapter didn't manage to hook you. I...

He is tall and muscular by our standards but he's just average height and build compared to most knights and warriors. Also, he's pretty studious, does that count? She's kneeling? lol

The blue mage is 5'4" or 5'6" I think while MC is 6'6" which is just average for knights and warriors who are anywhere from 6'4" to 6'10". Maid is a solid 6' and the sorceress on the right is 6'2". Both the maid and the sorceress are on the taller side compared to most humans though. Also, I...

I do post to multiple platforms, and funnily enough, I have the most reader retention on SH. RR only has 45 followers, WN only has 55 collections, Ao3 only has 12 bookmarks, while SH has 229 readers. It's doing well enough in a general sense, but I remember getting plenty of complaints with the...

Great Journey: Whims of Fate A man from a broken marriage is reborn in a world of swords and magic. A divine goddess grants him new purpose, a perfect maid stands loyally at his side, and a land of his own awaits his rule. Yet the world holds far more than he ever imagined. He finds himself on...

It's why I'm considering writing a story with all the unpopular tags. This way, I get to be the top-ranked story on it. lol I don't even know what kind of story that would be, but wouldn't that be interesting in and of itself?

Favorites depend entirely on the person reading. They are like unicorns that occasionally grace a random story with their presence once in a blue moon. Rarely do they actually mean someone liked that particular chapter. Also, like views, they can be inflated by having more chapters with fewer...