Recent content by Avery_Line

That is also my YT homepage. Well done.

No problem, good luck with the story!

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Not in my opinion. Providing critiques is one of the quickest paths that helped me towards refining my own writing. Many online crit groups have a requirement that you earn your crits by critiquing others. It is a quality control measure that works well.

My story is better.

If it's not too personal to ask, why are you planning to remaster your story? Knowing a bit more would help with advice. I once rewrote a complete novel three times. It was unsatisfying each time. I finally realized what the story is about, and everything clicked. The fourth rewrite is going...

In really hoping it's your big break... what? Or did you mean "I'm really hoping"...? I have never heard of people offering chapters on PayPal. PayPal is not a marketplace, and has no means to offer digital products for sale that I'm aware of. So I wouldn't say that's the normal way. I don't...

The beta readers I've always found (and been) come from three places: crit groups, author bootcamps, or online support groups such as NaNoWriMo, pitch madness, writers helping writers, etc. In each of these cases they are communities where I established credibility by reading and critiquing...

POV hijinks are a real PITA, at least for me. It took a long time to get my brain around it and it still is not second nature. Unless you are really nuanced and know all the rules inside and out, writing a scene with dual POV is not recommended. "A bit of Beta's and a bit of the Narrator's POV"...

I know nothing about the story or anything else you've written, so this is a hot take. You're writing in third person omniscient, past tense, which is a really common format, but requires some care to keep it feeling immediate. Particularly when you are using past tense to describe events that...

In reality, building my world took years. Like many people posted here, I have maps and travel guides and magical systems and such. Detailed mythologies and ancient texts. I desperately wish someone had told me (and they probably did, I wish I had listened) to do as little world building as...

I really like the conceit of writing from the perspective of a diary. I don't think I've ever seen an epistolary novel where one of the correspondents is the actual "letter" itself. Sentient paper. It's a neat hook. I feel like this story repeats itself too much. For example, the diary asking...

Your synposis is better than most. You have a tight character focus with personal stakes, and an emotion (sad.) So right there you're ahead of most. I suggest you ditch the rhetorical questions and instead end with a hook. Your first chapter is, to say the least, confusing. I'm guessing "Allow...

I read the first chapter, and here's what I noticed: Third person omniscient has fallen out of favor in the last forty years or so. For two reasons in particular: it is distancing to the reader, and it is difficult to do well. Both of those are affecting your story. As for distance, we get...

Critique others. Read good books, but critically. Don't just read them, but deconstruct what the author did right. With a dozen critiques under your belt, and having analyzed a good model book or two, sit down with your own story and write/edit it with specific goals in mind, such as: 1) Did...