Recent content by ARedFox

Melas. Worse yet it was shipped to Amazon. New chapters were removed quickly after being posted giving little time to catch them. If you missed it, oh well. Now I think it’s on hiatus but with new chapters being removed I genuinely might have just missed them. I liked it because it was...

Though I am seriously considering I just might not have read the right novels leading to my current opinion. I’m referring to a small subset of all sci-fi novels with this. And I think most novels where the main character is an AI do acknowledge stuff like limitations in a perfectly fine...

Since you thought that was long winded let me give you a present ;)

It really depends on the execution. Some stories have it as people go in mecha and then fight each other in space. Others have them as just tools for something like mining or moving. It’s just interesting to me because at times they can feel just as bad as using melee when lasers exist and...

Write it in the description somewhere. Beyond the amazing tips above consider more platforms. RR and scribblehub are great, but they are only 2 of many. Try to have a main site (or a few) and link it in the description or mention it if they ban links. Maybe you post 1-2 chapters more there for...

Somehow didn’t know about the tilting phones showing that. Makes sense, but it still bugs me. I also do think there is some potential. Something that avoids or becomes invisible to the basic scouting drones and then starts hunting when the landing crew feel they are safe. Or having spacecraft...

Not quoting as I’m on a phone rn. Spoiler again to save space.

You went through all this work and didn’t link your story either in this tread or the other one I saw. Link please. I also wonder how people feel about the lack of unmanned and fully autonomous spacecraft. Feels like a lot of stories just have the AI be limited or say they had a rebellion and...

Sure. I'll counter cause I got nothing better to do and it seems fun. Spoiler again to minimize space. [/SPOILER]

TLDR: You don't need to try and explain systems. Keep it simple and focus on stats, classes, and skills especially if it's you're first time. You can always expand or revise your system later when you have more experience or help. Try and focus on character depth and not having everything go...

Don’t remember dragon kin but it might be this. Isekai Mahou wa Okureteru aka Magic in the other world is far too behind. WN LN

The agency doesn’t need to appear in this chapter. It just needs to appear at some point at the end of this school terrorism event. As for depth, it’s showing thoughts and emotions. In the first version, there are moments where she has to psych herself up like “C’mon Hanna. You can do it. Just...

I don’t think it’s either really an improvement or a degrading. Simply different. Again, completely good writing. Better than I could do. Just minor refinements. The line about most teachers and students being in home room is kinda redundant. Home room implies that most of the teachers will be...

Truthfully, I don’t know. I don’t think there’s any rule with how you have to start a story. And the start you have is completely fine. It’s such a minor thing that she could just mention it in conversation in a later chapter or not mention it at all. Something as simple as “Luckily I was going...

This may come off as nitpicky, and I am sorry for that. Overall it’s great.