What little details irks you when reading?

[foxoftheasterisk]

y'all are talking about this high level stuff when i was just gonna say when characters stretch out a sound that can't be stretched out, e.g. "stopppppppppp"

 

[MagdalenaForsberg]

When people fall in love based on nothing.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Might be my nitpicking, but what is your idea of its proper usage?

Rather simple. I will start with what killing intent shouldn't be. It shouldn't be an aura, it shouldn't be a bullshit powerup, it shouldn't be a power one can use, and so on. What killing intent should be is a combination of facial expression, gaze, and posture\muscle tension. Killing intent is more of a facial expression, same as, for example, "grimace of pain" or "contorted in fear". Other people can see it the same way they can see someone feeling joy, pain, fear, etc.

 

[NotaNuffian]

Rather simple. I will start with what killing intent shouldn't be. It shouldn't be an aura, it shouldn't be a bullshit powerup, it shouldn't be a power one can use, and so on. What killing intent should be is a combination of facial expression, gaze, and posture\muscle tension. Killing intent is more of a facial expression, same as, for example, "grimace of pain" or "contorted in fear". Other people can see it the same way they can see someone feeling joy, pain, fear, etc.

So Conqueror Haki should be psychic damage.

The whole bloodlust aura thing can be psychic remnants of the fallen victims cursing at their murderer.

So what would you call someone, other than complete bullshit, that they "felt" someone's killing intent/ gaze/ psychic damage like feeling chills down spine/ goosebumps standing/ etc?

 

[Arkus86]

Rather simple. I will start with what killing intent shouldn't be. It shouldn't be an aura, it shouldn't be a bullshit powerup, it shouldn't be a power one can use, and so on. What killing intent should be is a combination of facial expression, gaze, and posture\muscle tension. Killing intent is more of a facial expression, same as, for example, "grimace of pain" or "contorted in fear". Other people can see it the same way they can see someone feeling joy, pain, fear, etc.

This absolutely is nitpicking, but killing intent can be a minor power-up, in the sense that you are not holding back if you are fully committed to kill. A matter of the conscious and subconscious mind that might make you pull your punches without you even realizing it if you are not committed. Really depends on the context though.
Similarly, while I agree it's not an aura, the body language/tone of voice can give a similar feeling of "radiating killing intent".

That is without fantasy/system shenanigans mixing things up. But yeah, in most stories it is certainly overblown, at least for real-world context.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

So what would you call someone, other than complete bullshit, that they "felt" someone's killing intent/ gaze/ psychic damage like feeling chills down spine/ goosebumps standing/ etc?

Nah, feeling goosebumps or chill is ok. Even freezing up is ok. The thing here is, do people die from feeling overwhelming love? You might say love is a different feeling. I say, if yandere is the one staring at you, you will freeze up or get goosebump, or feel chills, etc. Yet no one ever was on the brink of death from overflowing love.

More than that, goosebumps and so on are an extension of fear. Can people die from fear? I think so. But they can't die from someone staring daggers at them.

This absolutely is nitpicking, but killing intent can be a minor power-up, in the sense that you are not holding back if you are fully committed to kill.

This is bullshit that authors come up with when they can't think of an interesting and smart way of one character defeating another one. The most lazy excuse. Instead of actually thinking about strategy and making a fight unique, instead of showcasing a high fighter IQ they pull this shit up. Because they can't, for the love of god, come up with an interesting fight. Samurai spirit my ass.

Similarly, while I agree it's not an aura, the body language/tone of voice can give a similar feeling of "radiating killing intent".

Same as above. Authors who can't write a good description use this phrase. It's not cool, it's not good, it's utter shit.

 

[ACertainPassingUser]

In Isekai,
MC forgets their old name, but remember many things.

Your own name is one of the hardest thing to forget. You may easily forget other people's name, including your family and friends.

If MC or any character loses so much memory, they even forget their own name, they should've been weakened.

Sure the body have reflex, and sometimes they can regain some old knowledge even if they don't remember how they got it in the past. But they're not as strong nor as stable as people who fully remmebrs their name.

 

[LeilaniOtter]

Swallowing a dictionary.
I hate when people do that.
There's no reason to use more words if you don't need to.
Just tell a story; don't try to impress us with your vocabulary.

 

[Hoshino]

I don't mind much, but sometimes there's one thing that makes me want to almost stop reading the novel if its excessive, and that is the mc being denser than a black hole, nya.

 

[NotaNuffian]

Nah, feeling goosebumps or chill is ok. Even freezing up is ok. The thing here is, do people die from feeling overwhelming love? You might say love is a different feeling. I say, if yandere is the one staring at you, you will freeze up or get goosebump, or feel chills, etc. Yet no one ever was on the brink of death from overflowing love.

More than that, goosebumps and so on are an extension of fear. Can people die from fear? I think so. But they can't die from someone staring daggers at them.

Frightened themselves to death?

Which is quite ironic and totally psychic damage.

Yes, I shall catagories it into psychic damage alongside hypnosis in my own work. Because I am a hack.

In Isekai,
MC forgets their old name, but remember many things.

Your own name is one of the hardest thing to forget. You may easily forget other people's name, including your family and friends.

If MC or any character loses so much memory, they even forget their own name, they should've been weakened.

Sure the body have reflex, and sometimes they can regain some old knowledge even if they don't remember how they got it in the past. But they're not as strong nor as stable as people who fully remmebrs their name.

I mean, having the reflex of a supersoldier is still quite cool.

But I don't think that name can be that important.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Because I am a hack.

?

 

[AnonUnlimited]

Wasted words on teasing relationships.
stuff like this isn't funny and drags out the plot.

 

[DireBadger]

I hate it when authors keep villains lowly, disgusting, perverted, and stupid. Okay, if the villain is written to illustrate how corrupt the world is, but keeping them for tens or even hundreds of chapters, even providing plot armor for the rotten villain, is simply unreasonable.

Writers like this fail to design a good villain. Maybe for her/him, if the rotten villain dies too early, she/he will have difficulty developing the plot. But seriously, guy, you are really ruining your story.

Imagine every time the reader encounters the villain's scene, she/he commits immoral acts repeatedly as if the author condones her/his immoral actions. I often encounter this kind of thing in Chinese novels (sometimes Korean novels too). It's okay if the rotten villain lives for a few chapters or at most a dozen chapters, but letting her/him live for hundreds of chapters is a real failure of writing.

And can the author create an iconic villain instead of a rotten villain? I mean, I miss iconic villains whose presence shook the world (and the readers' minds) like Aizen and Tendo Pain.

Meh, I do this, but it's sort of a case like 'zorg' from the Fifth Element. You have to show how evil he is, but it's not a direct power comparison. Sure, Lilu could have taken out Zorg before you could blink, but he wasn't there to be taken out.

A good 'superevil master villain' is a plot element, not a character; however, for the 'lesser villains', I like to make people wonder if, with the same history and understandings, they might act the same way.

 

[Anonjohn20]

So what would you call someone, other than complete bullshit, that they "felt" someone's killing intent/ gaze/ psychic damage like feeling chills down spine/ goosebumps standing/ etc?

Anon, people have been sizing each other up since we were cavemen. Ask anyone who's ever been in a barfight or streetfight. You can have some idea of their intent even before they attack.

 

[JayDirex]

"Why is my heart beating like crazy? What is this feeling?"

This dialogue irks me coz yeah, I have yet to see a person irl say it to themselves because love and feelings are well-known to us as we grow up.

And in connection...

"You're cute."

*heart beats like crazy

"I think he's kind. I'e fallen for him!"

Irl, if one tells this to a girl, 95% chance he gets mistaken for a creep. 5% chance he gets off with it coz he's handsome. Irks me a lot coz tis so unnatural.

Honorable mentions...

1) The couple goes on a date and encounters a lost kid.

-irks the hell out of me whenever I read romance manga/LN coz tis lazy writing on the part of the author trying to show everyone his/her MC is a kind soul.

I mean, there are other ways to do this.

2) The "I save you; I get the seggs"

-my personal bias, but yeah, dude, try to be a person of integrity for once. Don't take advantage of someone else's goodwill.

3) The "This is a hero/adventurer/dungeon diving story, so MC gets a sword for his weapon"

-yeah, cool moves, I get it. But tis unnatural knowing that swords are expensive back in the day, and there are lots of variants (thus different fighting techniques) other than the long pointy stick common in isekai.

This one is hilarious but don't forget, these are a bunch of amateur Authors writing romance. they watch K-dramas and awkwardly use things they saw there in their stories and stuff. Not justifying it, but yeah, they could be more original.

When people fall in love based on nothing.

Their eyes met in the cafe at noon, so they decided to get married that evening. This is perfectly normal behavior!

 

[Max02]

Excess of drama.
Excess of cussing and vulgarity.
Excess of gore.
Excess of plot armor.
Excess of dilly-dallying.

And a lot of other excesses.

 

[OniKaniki]

I think we can agree on character dialogue in this point. I dislike author using it as yapping, the same with the thought (in heart self-monologue). Which some of them spoil some part of the story without realizing.

self-monologue are need for foreshadowing, and yapping also come across with slice of life moment, when they reduce the tension of the story. the dialogue and self-monologue shouldn't go in the direction of "i'm [x], i'm living in [x],..." like introduction.
i personally don't mind ppl yapping, if it's funny. same goes for self-monologue, when character realize something, or they figure out an important things for the plot to advance

 

[VanVeleca]

I don't like it when two or more characters talk within the same paragraph. For example like this:

"What a fine evening." John said as he looked at the window. "How can you tell? You're staring at the curtains." his loyal companion asked.

I like it more like this:

"What a fine evening." John said as he looked at the window.

"How can you tell? You're staring at the curtains." his loyal companion asked.

It just peeves me off because I will begin to read a sentence and think character A is saying it when in reality character B is speaking right now. Sometimes it's done on purpose to confuse the reader in an entertaining way...but it just jumbles my head too much

 

[DireBadger]

Basically, every anime trope. all of them.

 

[LuoirM]

Killing intent the way it is usually used and described in novels.

a lot because of Asian mistranslation because English lacks the word necessary