Doravg's free feedback thread (Closed to catch up with all the requests)

[HelloHound]

Done, you can check the review when you want. Your story was very hard for me to read, but not because of the grammar or style. You have them down pat. Because of the child abuse and bullying. It reminded me of my own childhood, and not in a good way. Still, your latest chapters see things look up for Sybil, so I will read the next chapter, when you update. Happy writing, @HelloHound

thanks for your hard work and for sticking to it; I'll happily read your review once the website gives it to me and yeah, the more control sybil's got on her situation the better it usually is, though life will occasionally dunk her in the river, she'll learn to swim

 

[TheMonotonePuppet]

Done, you can check the review when you want. Your story was very hard for me to read, but not because of the grammar or style. You have them down pat. Because of the child abuse and bullying. It reminded me of my own childhood, and not in a good way. Still, your latest chapters see things look up for Sybil, so I will read the next chapter, when you update. Happy writing, @HelloHound

I shall take my story off of the requests then. My story has a good chance of being as bad or worse, though I haven't read HelloHound's story yet. Feedback is great, but mental health is greater!
Edit: My request post is deleted. Have a great day!

 

[Deleted member 68927]

I shall take my story off of the requests then. My story has a good chance of being as bad or worse, though I haven't read HelloHound's story yet. Feedback is great, but mental health is greater!
Edit: My request post is deleted. Have a great day!

as you wish.

 

[TheMonotonePuppet]

as you wish.

*thumbs-up!*
Just imagining you bowing and tucking your top hat beneath your arm. LOL!

 

[Seaspecter]

I've been burned on a few of these threads because I'm not all that good a writing but maybe I'll give it a try again. Here's my story I'll warn you it's crude and can get kind of gory.

Anna’s Dream

This web novel is about Anna the only child of the enigmatic being known as The Dreamer. Join her as she travels a world filled with magic and wonders. She's not the chosen one, she has no destiny and there's no telling what she's going to do next, other than...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Rhaps]

Current Rhaps is sleepy, so the judgement function has decreased.

Infinity in the Void – Freedom in the Abyss

A girl woke up in a white room, with no memory of who she was. Yet she knew deep inside her held a power unlike anyone, represented by the markings, the tattoos of the Eight Pointed Star, given to her by an unknown force. With her power, endless possibilities were...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[RyujiSakamata]

I am in need of something to listen to while playing Civilization V, so I offer this thread. I can't promise I will be fast, but I would want to read most of the story, before I leave a review on it, not on this thread, with a rating. As someone who has more than 90 stories under her belt, I think I can give a couple of insights as well. That said, I have a lot to learn about the writing craft as well, so I hope that your story can give me fresh ideas, and help me relax after my writing session. Every story is welcome. I feel like broadening my palate.
I could also give a comment or two, and definitely a heart for every chapter I listen to. With this thread, I want to see the writing soul of the Scribble Hub population.
Happy writing, everyone!
(No, I don't want for you to read my stories in return. Don't sweat it.)
Currently, reading:
Divine Puppets 23/23- Review given.
Mythos: My Supernatural Hunting Manual- 1/1- Constructive feedback given. Will wait for at least 10 chapters before the review. 2/10
For Want of a House- next in line. 55/55
Gemstone Princess: The Rise of Amalia

Would you mind criticizing one of my works too? For the story improvement purposes as the reason. Thank you very much.

Kyouhana: Transmigrated into the Worst Book and Became the Dark Lord’s Bride

Sachika Fujimoto, a part-timer college student, dies in a bookstore murder. She never expects to wake up in a world based on the worst book ever made. Reincarnated as Veniara Ravelgrace, the soon-to-be 'Dark Lord's Bride,' she must navigate her way out through the cliché-filled fantasy romance...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Deleted member 68927]

Gemstone Princess: The Rise of Amalia

Gemstone Princess: The Rise of Amalia is a magical adventure that takes Amalia from the non-magical world of Elca to the magical Lita. When a dark curse crosses the boundaries between worlds and impacts Amalia's village, she learns that the curse is looking for her. The only way to stop...

www.scribblehub.com

I've made a few adjustments based on some feedback I got before. I shortened the chapters to be better suited for reading on a phone.

Good read overall! You should see the review in a bit.
A question for everyone:
So, do you guys like the fact that I read all the chapters, before giving the review? I know that takes me a long time, but I think that it helps with my judgement. You put in the work to put the chapters forward, I put in the work to read them and sink in your worlds. I know you have to wait for a while, since I don't read every day, but that is better than reading the first chapter and calling it a day, right?
Edit: I noticed that two of the people on this thread have 200k long books. So, 10 chapters, and if I like it, I will read more. The best I can do.

 

[Raymann]

Good read overall! You should see the review in a bit.
A question for everyone:
So, do you guys like the fact that I read all the chapters, before giving the review? I know that takes me a long time, but I think that it helps with my judgement. You put in the work to put the chapters forward, I put in the work to read them and sink in your worlds. I know you have to wait for a while, since I don't read every day, but that is better than reading the first chapter and calling it a day, right?
Edit: I noticed that two of the people on this thread have 200k long books. So, 10 chapters, and if I like it, I will read more. The best I can do.

I salute your patience. Long chapters make me dizzy.

 

[TheKillingAlice]

I really have no idea what to expect, but if you take on the quest and the result destroys my story's rating, so be it. I hope you will take a look at my story, once you have time for it.

The Crazy Daughter of the Duke’s Family

Celia had fought creatures called 'Visitors' for as long as she could remember. Together with Pan, a Visitor of Special Grade himself, her single goal was to survive. Yet after dying an unexpected death one day, she woke up and found herself as that one inconsequential, short lived villainess...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Deleted member 68927]

I really have no idea what to expect, but if you take on the quest and the result destroys my story's rating, so be it. I hope you will take a look at my story, once you have time for it.

The Crazy Daughter of the Duke’s Family

Celia had fought creatures called 'Visitors' for as long as she could remember. Together with Pan, a Visitor of Special Grade himself, her single goal was to survive. Yet after dying an unexpected death one day, she woke up and found herself as that one inconsequential, short lived villainess...

www.scribblehub.com

Don't you worry, I give everyone a 5-star rating. But my review will be honest. That much, I can promise you.

 

[AdOtherwise]

I am in need of something to listen to while playing Civilization V, so I offer this thread. I can't promise I will be fast, but I would want to read most of the story, before I leave a review on it, not on this thread, with a rating. As someone who has more than 90 stories under her belt, I think I can give a couple of insights as well. That said, I have a lot to learn about the writing craft as well, so I hope that your story can give me fresh ideas, and help me relax after my writing session. Every story is welcome. I feel like broadening my palate.
I could also give a comment or two, and definitely a heart for every chapter I listen to. With this thread, I want to see the writing soul of the Scribble Hub population.
Happy writing, everyone!
(No, I don't want for you to read my stories in return. Don't sweat it.)
Currently, reading:
Divine Puppets 23/23- Review given.
Mythos: My Supernatural Hunting Manual- 1/1- Constructive feedback given. Will wait for at least 10 chapters before the review. 2/10
For Want of a House- next in line. 55/55
Gemstone Princess: The Rise of Amalia- 12/12 Review given.
A Merc’s Guide to Mercing

Lowly Ascent

Within a desolate realm, where discarded worlds were stitched together, a rupture tore open, releasing a small child into the fragmented expanse. Above him, the sky revealed three eerie moons, while an ominous black mass loomed ominously in their wake. Disoriented and engulfed by a putrid...

www.scribblehub.com

First few chapters I plan to revise soon but I would be glad to hear your thoughts :)

 

[Deleted member 68927]

A Merc’s Guide to Mercing

Ah, being a Mercenary, it's like being a soldier except more fun, and you don't have to care about silly things like 'not blowing up a children's hospital' Follow a team of ten totally unprofessional soldiers of fortune as people throw money at them to solve tasks that range from...

www.scribblehub.com

Here it is, don't hold back.

Done! You should get a notification with the review soon!
I am beginning to think that my reviews are not well received, since I don't get feedback on them. I hope I am not making people angry with them. That is not their purpose.

 

[HelloHound]

Good read overall! You should see the review in a bit.
A question for everyone:
So, do you guys like the fact that I read all the chapters, before giving the review? I know that takes me a long time, but I think that it helps with my judgement. You put in the work to put the chapters forward, I put in the work to read them and sink in your worlds. I know you have to wait for a while, since I don't read every day, but that is better than reading the first chapter and calling it a day, right?
Edit: I noticed that two of the people on this thread have 200k long books. So, 10 chapters, and if I like it, I will read more. The best I can do.

I liked the fact that you read my entire story before passing along your thoughts

 

[Jay_stylez]

Hey my name is jay, could you check out my novel when you get the chance, no rush. It's my first time writing on here so i only have one chapter out, I have more somewhere else but idk if it's ok to promote other apps on here.

The little cat from bail more

This is the story of a cat who was born ill and was killed by its mother being too weak to exist. The life of Mau was short, but now with the opportunity to live again in a world of fantasy and advanced technology, he is determined not only to...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Seaspecter]

Edit: I noticed that two of the people on this thread have 200k long books. So, 10 chapters, and if I like it, I will read more. The best I can do.

My book's not for everyone so don't worry about reading if you don't like it.

 

[HelloHound]

My book's not for everyone so don't worry about reading if you don't like it.

your book gets better once you hit your stride

 

[Slays_The_Crusader]

Done! You should get a notification with the review soon!
I am beginning to think that my reviews are not well received, since I don't get feedback on them. I hope I am not making people angry with them. That is not their purpose.

Thanks for your review man, I'm glad you liked it.
Also thanks for the advice about putting Urban Fantasy in the tags so that people don't get confused when the Mercs do wacky things, though I guess your review could serve as a warning of sorts, lol.

 

[Seaspecter]

your book gets better once you hit your stride

Thanks, my book is the first thing I've ever written, as far as fiction goes, and I wrote the first 32 chapters in a month and the first ten or so were in a few days so I had no idea what I was doing yet.

 

[LunaSoltaer]

My book's not for everyone so don't worry about reading if you don't like it.

My book stabbed a girl. Somehow. So I get it.

And @HelloHound is absolutely correct, speaking as a reader :)